Hello, Malik Swafford! Thank you for showing us your essay!! Your title is pretty simple but it’s nice! I can sure your first sentence and second sentence are very attractive!…
The authors use of this statement more effectively gets out his point along with using facts and an emotional understanding. This essay was a lot more clear and effective than the first because of how the author uses and explains his facts…
Throughout the piece I made an effort to incorporate as many rhetorical devices as I could. The first example is the first sentence of the argument being a tri colon. I decided to choose this device in particular because of the fact that it interests an audience right away, and then also sparks curiosity about the topic. In the second paragraph, I chose to use an epistrophe by repeating “because of music” at the end of three sentences. My reasoning behind this is that I truly wanted the audience to grasp the concept of how powerful music is to children.…
“And Again, You May Not Use My Narrative Essay As The Title For Your Essay.” Said Mrs. Kern Calmly But Boldly, Then She Continued Her Speech And Told Us To Finish An Outline Before We Begin Writing. “Oh Great” I Thought Quietly In My Head, “I Have No Idea What To Put In My Story”.…
while my mother and I were in the store There are many sentence errors in the essay that can be found and corrected with paperrater.com. looking at the guinea pigs. I really noticed this cute one that I really wanted, so I asked my mom if I could get one too. At first she had said no, but once she asked the worker how much they were.…
For me, I had a good thesis, but did not have it in the correct place in the introduction. When I began writing this paper I knew that grammar was going to be a big problem for me. Comma splices were one of the major grammar problems for me. A comma splice is supposed to bring two independent clauses together. An example of how I used comma splices is; “Coming from…
Supporting Narrative In April 2015, I applied for experiential learning credits towards my Bachelor of Science degree in the Office Administration and Technology program. As a result, I earned three credits for ACED 2940 Basic Admin Office Skills and four credits for ACED 3940 Intermediate Admin Office Skills. Once again, I will demonstrate how work experience, technical skills, and personal development have provided me with college-level learning. This year will mark my ninth year working full-time for a local government agency as an administrative assistant and recording-secretary.…
3. This essay is organized like the narrative essays discussed in class. 4. The introductory paragraph is interesting. I would suggest adding more descriptive words on how you felt at the time.…
Before you decide to add a comma and a conjunction,…
Responding to a narrative response Numerous individuals need help or have helped somebody, the most affecting way I have helped somebody was helping my mom while she was pregnant. I generally helped her with my three year old sister Kaitlynn, I tackled the protective obligations so my mother could unwind, and after my mother had my sibling Colton I generally helped her with both of the children. Being pregnant and having another little rascal to look after can be extremely stressful and hard. I would always help my mom out and take kaitlynn off of her hands. It would be little things like taking Kaitlynn out to the park to play or just hanging out with her so my mom could get a quick nap in.…
Arrived at 6:30. Explored the lexis nexus website. I began warming up and stretching. At 7:00, I joined to Pirl, Doyle, and Duck in the fish bowl hallway. PT started at 7:15.…
It is understandable that this piece might be seen as in need of the most improvement. While it is not the worst in a sense of technicality or grammar, I feel that it suffers from a lack of opinion. I think this piece is my worst because it has no strong message or new information. It may be correct academically, but it is almost a waste of a paper since it doesn’t add any substantial knowledge to myself as a student. This perspective might be a little harsh on myself, however I think it dramatically illustrates my later improvement when compared to my last few essays.…
I grew up in a single mother household in the Bronx from the age of 7. Growing up, I always saw my mother to be the hero, the one I can count on, my confidant. I remember my parents being together when I was a child. I moved to my grandmother’s house and when I came back to live with my parents it was only my mother. At the age of 7, I couldn’t understand why my father was never there.…
On 06-30-16 at approximately 0800 hrs I Corporal Rusty Meaux WAS DISPATCHED TO 2714 HWY 14 BUSINESS OF SUPER 8. Upon my arrival I SPOKE TO Reporting Person ASHLEY CAMILLE WHO STATED UPON HER ARRIVAL TO WORK SHE WAS NOTIFIED OF A ROOM WITH DAMAGE. ASHLEY BROUGHT me TO ROOM#157 AND SHOWED me AN EXTERIOR WINDOW WITH THREE WINDOW PANELS BROKEN. A COFFEE TABLE THROWN AND THE COVER TO THE A/C UNIT BROKEN OFF. I ALSO…