Analyzing The Essay 'Do Not Use The Word Thing'

Alaina Zappulla
Ms. Miles
Seventh Grade English
Essays: Area to Improve
1.
Do not use the word “thing” *Use stronger noun*
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2.
Make sure all sentences support the thesis statement
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3.
Make sure all quotes are relevant to the topic
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4.
Do not use first person in the literary cirque
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5.
Make sure your paragraph follow the books order of events
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6.
Never write about your own feelings!!!!!
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7.
Must include 2-3 quotes in every paragraph.
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8.
Explain everything thoroughly!
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9.
Minimize the amount of baby verbs used throughout the essay!!!!!
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10.
Proof-read before you turn it in!!!!!!!!!
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11.
Underline the title or italics
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12.
Include Works Cited - FORMAT CORRECTLY
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13.
Make sure all proper nouns are capitalized
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14.
Stay in present tense
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15.
Make sure you use the apostrophe in the right way
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16.
Make sure character's names are spelled correctly
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17.
Add transitional words
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18.
Set the scene
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19.
Double space entire essay
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20.
Include theme and author’s name in title
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21.
Write complete sentences
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22.
No contractions
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23.
Use commas correctly
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Animals experience the same pain level as humans. So with animal testing we are putting animals through a lot of pain. Nevertheless, with animal testing we are killing over 100 million animals every year. We are also killing over 22,000 cats every year, cats are also known as one of the most kindest animals. Even though people think that we are saving human lives by risking animals lives. This is not always the case, drugs they may work on animals may not always work on humans. In the end, animal testing is cruel and malicious and needs to be stopped, do you still think animal testing is a good