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Prologue
She lifted her cards. Lily glanced through them, and slid a two of clubs across the table. She tried to disguise her smirk when one of her opponents handed her a four of diamonds in return. The game quickly accelerated intobecame a flurry of red and black. All too soon, Lily slapped down an impressive string of cards. The other three men at the (describe table) stiffened and took no effort to hide their gasps. Lily scooped up her winnings in one fluid motion, and practically strutted out the door. She just about lived off of poker, and was considered the best one around. “Little Lily”, “Loner Lily”, “Loopy Lily”. Those were the names of her past; not anymore. As soon as she had put some distance between her and the men, Lily dropped her cover. She hummed an odd tune as she stumbled down the cobblestone street, her eyes brimming with tears. She walked away from her life as a poker legend, away from the grand casino, away from cards.
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Lily walked nervously up to the front desk of the library. She was terrified by the …show more content…
Lily’s head was spinning from the noise and the heat, and she was about to protest, when she realized that the room had gone quiet. Valerie was staring at her with her mouth hanging open. A quick scan of the room confirmed that everyone else was too. Lily looked down at the poker table. Somehow, she had won a game that she had no memory of playing. Lily had no recollection of the past five minutes, which was very strange indeed. “I want to play her!” a masculine voice bellowed. It was the band member who gave her the party
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Thank you so much for taking the time off to edit this! Much appreciated!
Prologue
She lifted her cards. Lily glanced through them, and slid a two of clubs across the table. She tried to disguise her smirk when one of her opponents handed her a four of diamonds in return. The game quickly accelerated intobecame a flurry of red and black. All too soon, Lily slapped down an impressive string of cards. The other three men at the (describe table) stiffened and took no effort to hide their gasps. Lily scooped up her winnings in one fluid motion, and practically strutted out the door. She just about lived off of poker, and was considered the best one around. “Little Lily”, “Loner Lily”, “Loopy Lily”. Those were the names of her past; not anymore. As soon as she had put some distance between her and the men, Lily dropped her cover. She hummed an odd tune as she stumbled down the cobblestone street, her eyes brimming with tears. She walked away from her life as a poker legend, away from the grand casino, away from cards.
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Lily walked nervously up to the front desk of the library. She was terrified by the …show more content…
Lily’s head was spinning from the noise and the heat, and she was about to protest, when she realized that the room had gone quiet. Valerie was staring at her with her mouth hanging open. A quick scan of the room confirmed that everyone else was too. Lily looked down at the poker table. Somehow, she had won a game that she had no memory of playing. Lily had no recollection of the past five minutes, which was very strange indeed. “I want to play her!” a masculine voice bellowed. It was the band member who gave her the party